In an eternal fight with my heart,
in the mysterious river where I lost my head ,
my focus is your breath,
I'm just trying to find a rest...
Of the modern wars I've fought against you,
I only remember the ones I’ve lost,
being worse than I can be,
knowing there were wars, that I couldn’t win.
I'm so sorry, I just went for glory,
but don't worry, I will change.
Don´t be surprise, if I try to love you,
more dificult was to find you; I'm not going to lose you.
I promise, I will never leave you,
I will never hurt you, I will just live for you.
Spectrum that I find in my head, child that one day open my heart,
beautiful princess that appears in my dreams.
You diguised my soul,
trying to appear better than I am,
trying to uncover my real feelings,
trying to find a place next to me...
[modo irónico on] Sublime [modo irónico off] jaja es coña ta bien tio jaja
ResponderEliminarIf you let me help you change a few things, it will be a superb job. In fact, it's already a great poem. You've got talent, boy.
ResponderEliminar.
Te reescribo el poema. Sólo hay dos versos que no he entendido bien, trata de reescribirlos con lo que quieres decir. Son el versos 15 y 17. Believe me, it's amazing how good your english is. These little mistakes you made are just a few silly things you can get over easy.
ResponderEliminarIn an eternal fight with my heart,
in the mysterious river where I lost my head ,
my focus is your breath,
I'm just trying to find a rest...
Of the modern wars I've fought against you,
I only remember the ones I’ve lost,
being worse than I can be,
knowing there were wars, that I couldn’t win.
I'm so sorry, I just went for glory,
but don't worry, I will change.
Don´t be surprise, if I try to love you,
more dificult was to find you; I'm not going to lose you.
I promise, I will never leave you,
I will never hurt you, I will just live for you.
Spectrum that I find in my head, child that one day open my heart,
beautiful princess that appears in my dreams.
You diguised my soul,
trying to appear better than I am,
trying to uncover my real feelings,
trying to find a place next to me...